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#434

Postby ewaggin » Tue Sep 26, 2017 1:24 am

The second sentence of Paragraph 2: "The met them...". It appears that the first word should be something else; "he" perhaps?
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Re: #434

Postby PaulGazis » Fri Sep 29, 2017 4:07 am

Thanks for spotting that! There appears to have been an obscure glitch in the HTML file that caused some text to vanish. The Signal Corps has been informed, and Jenkins assures us that matters have been set to rights.
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Re: #434

Postby ewaggin » Fri Oct 06, 2017 1:11 am

I believe that "The station's manager" isn't the right choice. In the third paragraph, Capt Everett asks this individual to direct him to the station manager. Perhaps "A station steward" would fit better?
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